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Ever think you'd say it better?



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Singing along to the radio. Full voice. You are a rock star. (Or country, or jazz, or opera, whatever your pleasure.)

And then comes that line...and it's like nails on a chalkboard....there's something about it that doesn't ring true. And you think, "It should be THIS instead."

Examples?

by accidentaltourist in Six Words Questions on Sep 18, 2012 | add favorite | T-shirt

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accidentaltourist says,

I'll go first.

"...still the one who can scratch my itch...still the one that I WISH WITH."

....so much more...romantic...than "...I wouldn't switch." Sheesh.

accidentaltourist says,

I agree with you, wabbit. Let's call it like we see it.

Another example, from a different genre:

"Redneck Woman", Gretchen Wilson

"you might think I'm trashy, but I don't give a rip....I'll stand bare-footed on my own front yard with a baby on my hip."....

No, should be "give a shit" and "on my tit"....THAT'S true redneck for you.

accidentaltourist says,

Please do add to the list. :)

How about Jewel's "You Were Meant For Me"...should end "try to tell myself it'll be alright, I shouldn't DRINK anymore tonight." Thinking won't hurt ya like drinking will.

Wench says,

More because this is what I thought the line actually was for a long time than anything, Ingrid Michaelson's "Glass" -

Actual: "You could make my head swirl. Used to know my every curve."
I always liked/thought it was, "You could make my head swirl. You studied my every curve."

accidentaltourist says,

I like your idea better too....see, we should be lyricists!

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