Someone help me out with some.memoirs.for.school.LA?

by Starmagic in Six Words Questions on Sep 20, 2011 | add favorite | T-shirt

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Starmagic says,

LA means language arts btw. Please help me out. I need more versions of these:
"cold water, hot sun, best-days EVER!"
"green trees…sooo tall, climbing higher up"
"deep, soft, warm, silky, fuzzy, catfur."
"pictures on my hand...always, always watching"
Can someone please help me?

Starmagic says,

LA means language arts btw. Please help me out. I need more versions of these:
"cold water, hot sun, best-days EVER!"
"green trees…sooo tall, climbing higher up"
"deep, soft, warm, silky, fuzzy, catfur."
"pictures on my hand...always, always watching"
Can someone please help me?

butterflyxxx says,

Advice from my writing group poetry editor - don't try to squeeze too many adjectives into a small space.
eg
Cold water, sun, best days EVER!
Green trees....sooo tall, climbing higher. Just a little paring gives a slightly different feel.You have the basic idea and beautiful imagery. Practice writing then editing - change, add or take away a word or two and see how it sounds (keep copies of the changes to go back to)Best wishes with your writing Starmagic

Starmagic says,

thank you sooo much

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